Young Writers Society

Hiya! Ley here to review.<3

First impressions... I loooooved this poem! I'm a sucker for finding relations between anything and life-- and this hit the nail right on the head! I was super impressed with your ability to take a topic, and conjure an amazing poem-- and relate it to the cycle of life.

When I was reading this I felt... Nostalgic, for some reason? I also felt kind of fuzzy if that makes sense? Like I'm in a simulation. The themes you presented here make the reader believe they're going through the cycle every day as well!

My favorite line/quote is...

If only,
To repeat the play.

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Let us commence with the reviewing!

Top Graham Cracker - A poem that questions the meaning of every day and the true purpose of living. A poem that asks: Is it all the same?

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I like this poem! I have an idea, though: Maybe some circus imagery to go with it all being a show? But it’s just an idea. This poem is still really good. :>

Chocolate Bar - I like how the poem seems to have a balance between the good and the bad, as though it all didn’t mean a thing when it came to the end. Life can feel like a circle most of the time, with the same thing happening during different times.

Closing Graham Cracker -A Merry-Go-Round of spiraling thoughts and questions, all never thought to be answered. I have enjoyed reading this.

I wish you an amazing day/night!

Hii Kubo! Cupid here! first of all, welcome to Yws glad to see another new writer here haha! I have a short review for you

So first off, your poem beautifully captures the highs and lows of life, in a concise and relatable manner. I really enjoy the contrasting imagery of sunny and rainy days, along with the transient nature of these experiences, you truly conveyed the nature of happiness and sadness.

And, since I'm a sucker for repetition~ certain phrases, such as "Sun or rain" and "Tell me," adds such beautiful emphasis and creates a really nice rhythmic tone. also, in the poem the questioning tone that's set (Correct me if I'm wrong-) expresses a sense of disillusionment and uncertainty, with the nature of life. In the final lines you have a such a melancholic undertone, suggesting kind of a sense of repetition and longing for something more.

Overall, Kubo, Your poem was very well written and also a personal fav now haha!

Thank you for sharing! Keep on writing young poet.

Fly high writer, Cupid.