Published December 26, 2010
Thoughts On Silent Night.
As chilly as the winds that bite
On the long road in a winter shade of pale
The traveler plods on un-ending snowy tide
The lights go down in the midst of gale
Now a vagabond in mind toddles on with not a destination in sight
A broken heart of a matrimony seeking to heal
A mind tormented by slander
A life wretched by 'ill fate'
A marriage mired in Karmic retribution or demonic curse?
She-cancer sufferer whose days are numbered
A heart torn between love and hate
He-misfit provider, a 'failure'
A soul suffering the same cancerous fangs that devour body and mind
Two mortals holed in torturous plight
The mind has no place to hide
The body only divine intervention can right
Silent night,Holy night
All is clear,all is bright
Written on Christmas Eve
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Thanks for your advice! I did a minor correction,but I am holding this piece for furthur comments from other reviewers~Being a graphic artist myself,I wanted more emphasis rather than just mere statements.That was why the article 'a' was left out after She and He.
Please comment and advise~!!!Thanks!