Published March 27, 2008
Please review, I want to get better and the only way I can do that is if you tell me how I did!
[b]Journeys always come and go,
But love seems to last forever,
But when the right person comes for you,
At the same time a journey comes in the door,
Who, what are you going to choose?
Journeys can end in sadness,
But love can end in fear
So when those two come through the door,
Which will you choose?
Which is near?
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I have to totally agree with Angel of Death. I see potential. Anyway, best wishes and good luck!
I think you have something here. If you work on it a little it'll get better. Where it says
who, what are you going to choose?
I think that needs to go or maybe try to fix it.
With a little work this can be better. It has promise. PM me when you fix this.