Published June 29, 2010
I know this is short, but Im trying out a new format, and not using speech here. So thanks in advance
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This was a good story, you should expand this alot more. Maybe give more description to the characters and the background to why this situation happened. I like that you didn't give names to most of the characters and when she giggled at the man's begging that really freaked me out. Hope to read more of your stuff later.
I really like the style.
I hope you write more of this-I'm intrigued.