Published August 24, 2010
I don't write poetry. This would be the reason why. This was all written, hafly based on the check flick I'm watching, and hafly based on my own life.
Enjoy, or try to.
~Kit
Please be-
Loving
Gentle touch
Sweet lips on mine
Crying until I see you again
Wanting more then you’d give me
Romantic
Flowers and chocolate
Random presents
Kisses on a whim
Make me feel like a princess
My savior
The one who makes me laugh
The one who makes me cry
The one who makes me want to die
Please be my guitar playing hero
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Hiya, Kit! Pink here
Well, we're practically on the same boat here. I don't write poetry much either...
Well, I agree with blackrose, for someone who doesn't write poetry, your poem was still pretty good.
Although, I have one teeny-weeny nitpick.
At the end you mention guitar playing hero and that's the name of the poem but during your poem the feeling I got was more of a prince than a guitar player. Maybe you could add another stanza about how he looks or even how he plays the guitar. It's just a suggestion, though.
Overall, your poem was nice
~Pink
Nice KitxKat, for someone who doesn't write poetry it's good. What film were you watching?
X BlackRose X