This is a good poem. You've put a lot of effort into it, and it sounds great.
I'm pretty bad at reviewing poetry, but I'll give it a shot
So, great poem here, I like your first lines a lot, they draw the reader in and make them want to carry on reading, the way any piece of writing should.
Your rhyming is good, the way you've thought up words to match, it's great, I usually find it hard, but you've made it seem effortless in this!
A very powerful poem, and I really like how you've spaced this, as it's not all crammed together and unsightly, as that puts the reader off, but yours is great! Also, I like your syllables too, it flows great when I read it.
Sorry I couldn't put any criticism in there, but I couldn't find any! I hope to read more of your writing! Good job!
-CFG
Points: 1810
Reviews: 183
Donate