Lay down with me ,
with the curtains closed ,
Forget about your past ,
don't remember things to be done in future .
close your eyes till it's completely dark
Try to hold ur breath till u can sense the moment rushing faster .
Come closer and know me better .
No one can see us here ,
Let's share the time we have till the last second of it's desired departure .
Hold me tight enough to carry my musk of gasoline on your body .
I will remember u till im reincarnated into something else .
Place where the sun has faded it's lights completely ,
Clothed sky created into an atmosphere
Her skin as white as the whitest snow,
The smell of nicotine in her body ,
Her hair dipped in gold .
Her beauty scarred into desires ,
the greedy world and a fragile heart ,
Her fate coated with disaster
Billions of her admirers ,
Everyone with a spare thought ,
The loneliness doesn't live without her .
She is a bad medicine ,
helping out the last resort .
Broken hearts , stuck with her memories
Forgetting her is easy , letting her makes an issue .
I stare at her to my last vision ,
But I have to accept the fact that she belongs to another man,
Separation is fated ,
No remedies to be tried out ,
Before i could say goodbye,
He reaches out for her ,
She doesn't hesitate to go kiss his lips .
She disappears slowly into the smoke ,
Her body burnet into ashes ,
He doesn't hesitate to kill her ,
I can see her dying , I can hear her scream ,
She burns right infront of me ,
But I'm paralyzed,
I'm locked in a body made of plastic,
I cannot fight back .
She accepts her sinful paradise ,
Heaven made of smokes .
Silence filled with regrets ,
He buries her memories deep in his forgotten thoughts .
Her unfaithful reasons collided with my mission .
My senses dry out numb ,
yet i don't like it without her ,
She's the definition to my creation .
A bargain made inside the pocket ,
love found in the last minutes of the wanted desire .
She burn in the air with no drama ,
The final thought hit us both ,
She's a cigarette stuck with a stoned lighter ........
The only thing I saw wrong with this piece is the fact that you used text language. Like "u" and "ur." If you are going to write something this beautiful, at least have the common sense to use proper English, meaning "you" instead of "u" and "your" instead of "ur." Other than that I think this is a very well written poem. Go back through it though, because some words that are singular need to be plural.
If you ever need anything just let me know,
Stephanie.
Thank u for the review Stephanie . I'll make sure I stop using the text language