The Struggle Is real

Nice thing to read! @KenMearsAuthor
Mahira here for a review. It's been long since I've reviewed any of the works. But as I found this one really good I think it's worth reviewing.

"The struggle is real
The world is on fire,
And everyone is a liar
The struggle is real
There is temptation and sin around every corner
I swear it is torture
The struggle is real
People are drawn in and dragged down
As everyone has a nervous breakdown
The struggle is real
War, famine, and death abound
And the wire around the world's neck is tightly wound
The struggle is real
I have seen so much pain
It has been seared into my brain
The struggle is real
The world is dying
And everyone is crying
The struggle is real
The world is on fire,
And everyone is a liar."

So talking about your poetry, I must say, it's really good. All the recent happenings you've reflected here are true. The best part of the poetry, as I felt, was its exclusive theme. Everyone's been writing something or other. But nobody has yet thought of writing on the series of such things which have been taking place since 2020 has started. Isn't it..?
Now language could be better but altogether it's not bad . Infact it is conveying the message you have given through this piece.
You could be more conscious about punctuation as well.
But overall a good piece of work. I believe that you are a very good writer. And also that you can be much better. You've got the intelligence one needs to be choosy about themes and titles. So keep it up! I wish you a good luck. Keep writing and posting!

Best wishes
Mahira

Hiya, it's Mack just dropping by with a review!

First, I really did enjoy this poem. It's an accurate reflection of a lot of the things we see in the world on a daily basis and I agree with a lot of the message that you're conveying here.

Second, I just had a few nit picky things with the meter that's more just a personal preference then anything else so feel free to take everything I say with a grain of salt! I like the format, but I feel like you could separate the stanza's between each "the struggle is real" because every three lines seems to be it's own little mini stanza. Then there are a few lines like "There is temptation and sin around every corner" and "And the wire around the world's neck is tightly wound" that are a little long compared to the rest of the lines and sort of throw off the rhythm that I had in my head as I continued reading.

Other then that, I didn't see any real grammar or punctuation issues with this and I really did enjoy it quite a lot. Hope this is a helpful review and I hope you have a good day/night depending on where you are in the world! I hope to see some more of your work in the future!

EverLight here with a review! This review is not intended to offend or hurt you or make your novel or poem seem bad, but be warned you may feel offended anyway

First Impression
This is partly true. But mostly what I feel is sorrow.

Nitpicks
You had none

Style & Flow
I have no suggestions here

You did an awesome job!

EverLight Out