Young Writers Society

This is Nikayla here dropping in for a review!

So I agree that this could be placed better, such as the Media Reviews forum where you can talk with other people about it and summarize it there, or even review it or critique it yourself! But that's nothing to worry about, since literary works can be virtually anything. Onto the review of your review, I would have liked to see it a bit more fleshed out or organized? You call it a review of the series, but it's more of a summary, since there isn't a hint of your opinion here except for in the beginning where you say that it's great.

That's great that you think it's great, but why is it great? I want to hear you explain that, and critique it, because we're not getting anything new if we're just listening to you summarize it. That's what the flaps on hardcovers and the backs on paperbacks. Even online, we could find that somewhere, but what we can't find is your specific opinion, which should be seen as important in this, since you want to 'review' it, that part for me didn't make too much sense.

I'd like to hear explaining on what you mean by 'review'. Go for a neater structure, perhaps one that you end up sticking to and you fill in from there where you summarize the media and then tell us why it's good or bad, all without giving the spoilers away? This should be more akin to that idea.

If you have any questions, don't be afraid to ask! I hope I helped and have a great day.

This review courtesy of

Hi Kemstar! (A belated welcome to YWS!)

So this is actually posted as a literary work; people give you feedback/criticism on it in the form of a review. (No worries!) To review, you go to someone else's work (I check the Green Room first) and then reply as a review (after reading and writing the review). Anyway, since you did go ahead and post your kind of synopsis, I will try and give you some feedback on what your novel is about as a whole!

Okay, so the love triangle seems pretty straight-forward and a little bland. If I were in your shoes, I would make her despise the Prince for some reason (maybe the Prince is a jerk, or there's some really intricate history between her and the Prince). Maybe she loses on purpose? Just a thought! I just don't want to see this turn out like another Hunger Games love trilogy.

I like the idea of a literal caste system; maybe you could elaborate more? Some questions to ask yourself could be "how are lower castes treated?", or "do lower and higher castes intermingle, or is that forbidden?". Also, "who created the caste system in the first place, and why?".

Also, just as a general comment, I would make sure to make each of your characters really distinct and even abnormal. Kind of along the lines of the love triangle thing, make your characters break that mold of being a "Mary Sue".

Anyway, the idea sounds interesting! I wish you luck on editing/writing your novel(s)! If you have any questions, feel free to ask me! I'll do my best to answer!

~Snazzy