Published August 23, 2011
As some of you may know, 567ajt is away for two months, therefore he himself cannot post his most recent works. We can contact each other by email, so he can email me his poems under his name. If some of you don't know why here's not here, then here's a link to a post made by him; viewtopic.php?t=86257 Hope you guys understand!
Again and again my body thrusts
My presence is numb and unknown
No feeling or pain or even hate
Love in it's most neglected form
I categorise my favourite things
Into sub sections of temptation
Do I give in to subsequent needs?
I won't let them get to me too soon
They stare at me as I pass the trail
I pass the test and I don't need detox
I don't need rehab I don't need pills
The only thing I need is heart for that
The only thing I need is heart
The only thing I need is love
The only thing I need is hate
The only thing I need heart for that
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Shame he can't be here to post. But anyways, I loved it. It had a really cool flow to it, and from what I gathered, it seemed to be in the point of view of a man who has completely lost the plot. I loved the last stanza; the repetition of 'the only thing I need..." was very effective, and is heavily linked to the idea of losing your mind. Because the narrator is saying it over and over again shows this. It's like he's contradicting himself of his sanity. It's overall a great poem I think. I give it 4 stars out of 5, just because I didn't really like the second stanza. Again, sorry to hear that he can't post himself. Tell him it's got my attention alright!