Hey! Forever here with a review!!
Things definitely made some progress here in terms of both structure and the story, especially with the inclusion of the dialogues. However, I will stick to my description point. I will not elaborate much but it's still required. For example, where you talked about the vehicles, I had a sudden urge to know what vehicles they exactly were. As we have never seen alien vehicles, I was quite excited to know about those.
Though it'a not the most important question, I am a bit curious to know if the aliens stole things. Most probably, they don't do it as I can understand from the story. If that's the case, they will actually need quite some time to understand if the humans indeed steal things. They will be shocked. It would be fun to see. And if the aliens did steal, obviously they will not have the humans in suspect. Hm.. good thing, that is.
Okay, I did get a sense of foreshadowing where Aria told about the splitting up. However, I hope that it doesn't happen that they split up. It will be a difficult situation, both for the characters and the readers. The readers might not get to see a few characters because of the POV. Let's see what happens tho, hopefully not something bad.
Honestly, I didn't have the idea that the transport was located within the city and that the drone has succweded at capturing pretty much the whole city. That's actually quite interesting how the drone has done that without being noticed by the aliens. And at the same time, it's even more interesting how the team is doing that. Okay, so the paths are definitely a bit complicated. I always think that the escape is over but it continues further. Now, if I am not wrong, they need to go to the second road. I am quite excited to go through the third road tho.
Keep Writing!!
~Forever
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