Young Writers Society

This poem is absolutely stunning!! Your imagery is beautiful, and it truly sucks the reader into the small world you've created. Your writing style is lovely, and the story here is whimsical and makes the reader want to know more.

I have only one small critique: The line "The petals opened which had been closed for days" is sort of clunky and awkward? Perhaps rephrasing this line would work better.

Otherwise, I have no critiques!! This poem was lovely.

Hi! This is nightshadows bring a new comment live to a theater near you! Ok, so enough of my uniqueness here are my thoughts:

Oh my gosh this is amazing. First off I love how it starts off so tranquil and calm then WHABAM!

It flows amazingly and the scene shifts very smoothly!! Then I think I spy with my little eye the SCARLET WITCH!! Ok i am praying that this is Wanda because anybody who knows me..knows I adore her!! Great job on the poem!!

Hi! Here to review your poem!
Okay, so, the rhyming is really good. I like how you kept finding different words to rhyme with "moonlight," and how you reused "rays" and "days" without making it seem like too much, and how you also threw in other rhymes ("cleared" and "feared"). I do think, though, that some people not appreciate the repetitiveness and might want a bit of variety with the rhymes.
You also did super well with describing the setting. It made me feel like I was actually there, and I know that some people (such as me) tend to enjoy that.
Maybe you should have put a bit of a trigger warning before saying that the scarlet witch was burning bright, because some people tend to have a hard time reading things like that, or have bad memories associated with burning and be really sensitive about that topic.
Mostly, I think that your poem is really good, and you have a real skill with poetry!
Thanks for reading!