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09.27.16: Original Work #1

by Kanome



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Mon Nov 28, 2016 12:21 pm
Lumi wrote a review...



Ayy Kanome!

I've wanted to leave some notes on this for a while, but haven't gotten around to it because ho hooooo busy.

Your eye work and chibi-style hair physics, arms/legs are well-done, but you need to, and I apologize for the phrasing of this, work on the execution of the breasts, the dress physics, and small details like how the tails of the dress don't meet the thighs realistically. I understand the desire for flare, but without apple hips or a form of hoop skirting, that's not going to happen realistically.

Beyond that, I'd love to see this colored! She reminds me of a chibi Keiko from YYH.

I look forward to seeing more from you!
Ty




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Fri Oct 07, 2016 1:34 pm
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That, my friend is a very good piece of art. I like how you didn't do anything fancy with the hair and that you've kept it simple. This is actually very good chibi artwork. I speak from experience becuase I draw very well, and even though I'm a newbie on this site, I know my art well at least.. Your hair spikes add a nice touch and they're all at the right length in the right places, which is very nice.

However, there is this though. Your neck and your eyebrows. Isn't the neck way too thin, and also, I feel you could have thickened the eyebrows a bit, to give it a bit of substance so that it isn't seen as just cutting through the hair and as an ugly line. :)




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Fri Oct 07, 2016 1:29 pm
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I like it a lot, we need to chat man! :)




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Fri Sep 30, 2016 1:35 am
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Oh my goodness me, how does one even go about reviewing a drawing?? Firstly, it's super cute! The hair is perfect for this style, and the curves and spikes are in all the right places. I mean, it curves a little as it touches behind her shoulder, and the bits on top stick out in natural places. You've done an amazing job on her legs and feet. I can never get feet right, but yours are shaped so well. The proportions are off for a realistic human but are spot on for your drawing style. The eyes are amazing, the lack of fingers doesn't draw anything away from this. The only thing that isn't quite right is her left breast. It begins a little high up when you consider where her bra/shirt strap leads. Otherwise, AMAZING!




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Thu Sep 29, 2016 5:15 am



Very cute! You've got a nice art style.

- Ardently




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Wed Sep 28, 2016 1:32 am
Megrim wrote a review...



Hi there! Saw this in the green room and thought it would be fun to try and review it. However, I REALLY don't know what I'm talking about that, so don't mind me too much.

This is a very cute image, for starters. I especially like the shoulders/straps and how the dress hangs on her. The legs/feet are pretty adorable too. I think you can rotate the image and save the rotated version, which would make it a lot easier to look at, because right now I keep turning my laptop sideways. I like her hair, but I have a personal preference for short hair that's just my taste :P

As for the negatives, hmm. The boob on the right (her left) looks smaller and not quite shaped the same as the other one, and my eye keeps getting stuck on that difference. I'm not a huge fan of her bangs, but again I think that's a taste/style thing and nothing to do with how it's drawn--though they almost feel too evenly spaced and sized? Also I don't like the nub hands. I imagine you did that because hands are hard to draw, or maybe it's a specific style (like I said, I don't know what I'm talking about), but I feel like some cute stylized cartoony fingers would be nice to have.

So... there you have it. My first ever critique on a drawing!





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