I feel lost inside myself,
I don’t know what to do.
I thought I was finally healing,
now I realize I can’t get over you.
I get nervous when I just see you,
I tremble when I hear your voice,
I don’t want to love you any longer,
But I don’t have a choice.
[Chorus]
Please someone hear me,
Someone take this pain away
Whoever you are I need you to come,
Come and make me feel okay
I need someone to understand,
But there’s nobody there.
Some of them ask me how I feel,
But they don’t really care.
Doesn’t anybody out there know
What I’m supposed to do?
It seems no matter how hard I try,
I can’t get over you.
[Chorus]
Please someone hear me ,
Someone take this pain away
Whoever you are I need you to come,
Come and make me feel okay
I have tried to mend my heart,
But all it did was fall apart.
Just when I tried to start out new,
I found myself right here with you.
[Chorus]
Please someone hear me,
Someone take this pain away
Whoever you are I need you to come,
Come and make me feel okay
I don’t know where I belong,
Can’t figure out what’s going wrong.
I just need someone to hear my voice,
Someone to make me feel alright.
[Chorus]
Please someone hear me,
Someone take this pain away
Whoever you are I need you to come,
Come and make me feel okay
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This is tough.
A name.
Here are a few:
Hear me
Unbreakable love
Take this pain away
It is something so yeah.
Really nice rhythm.
Well done
You have a great rhythm here and the rhyme is effective but you need to fix the punctuation. You need to add full stops, put the commas in the right spaces ect. Other then that though, it's a sweet song. Not too unique admittedly but then, how unique can you be with a love song? The chorus flows well and is quite memorable but it sounds a little repetetive towards the end so perhaps work on that a little?