Published September 29, 2007
The betrayer and the betrayed.
That is what I am.
Not your friend, or your "ally".
I am now who I want to be.
No more bullshit, no more lies.
I am glad to finally have some peace.
No more negativity, no more control.
You are nothing to me now.
Get away, I don't want to hear it;
The shit that spews from your mouth.
You wretched thing, I hope you bleed,
And die an untimely death.
Dead to the world, I hope you'll be.
If I ever see your stupid face again,
I'll tear it apart with the hatred
That you used to control my life.
You are the betrayer.
I am the Betrayed.
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Emily scares me. *hides*
I'm terrible with poetry; I just like to badger you. Which is why my future reign as Editor-in-Chief will be one of extreme terror.
...Deal.
Yeah, that was a pointless ramble which means nothing to anyone besides you.
-St. Razorblade
The Official YWS Pirate
(and the person who pokes you in two of your classes... hehe.)
The title is a little bland. the poem itself is more a thought bubble than a poem to me. Its very simple with no real structure. No flow, or rhythm.
Your also covering a very common them so it's very important to make it your own. You don't want to sound like a broken record.
The good thing about having a common theme is that it is relatable. The hard part is fighting to get it an an anle that has never been done before. But keep working at it! Nice work.