I am from

First thing I wanna say, Live long and prosper. Anyway, I love the theming of this poem. This idea of your inspirations influencing you, is just all too familar. And I like it. Everything you indulge yourself in, will have some kind of affect, one way or the other. That's something I can relate to, because all the show i've watched have inspired me, such as doctor who, and all of his empowering quotes. I also like the mention of thinks like "spicey chicken," or, "japanese music." These are a few of the things you love, and they are a part of you, and they make up your identity. I give this poem, a 10/10.

This is Nikayla here for a review.

I'm not the hugest fan of doing these poems and I know you did this for class, so I may as well give it a shot. One of the first things that I noticed that happened to be a turn-off of the poem for me is the lack of stanzas or structure that you have here. A simple dash or "~" could divide up the stanzas and make it look much cleaner and neater.

Moving on from that, something that I found interesting about this is the wide and broad spectrum of what you can do with the 'I Am From' and yet you chose to do this. The main thing that I disliked about the poem was the lack of focus that you have here. You jump around from thing to thing and while that can be good in some places, I would like to see smoother transitioning.

I noticed that you put some of your favorite things in the poem, or at least what I assume to be due to the Author's Note at the bottom, and this is something that always gets on my nerves as a personal pet peeve. You don't have to change your poem or anything of that sort, but for some reason I've never liked references to other things in fiction itself because it feels like fiction-ception. I suggest letting the 'I am from' line sort of guide you throughout the poem and you can start out each stanza by saying that and that would help the poem have more focus in what it's trying to do.

I like the poem for what it is because it does tell about you and accomplishes where you are 'from', but it makes me wonder since I would've probably made the poem more emotion-based or sentimental. I would like to see you break this into different sections or stanzas and them to tackle each one to make it feel like it has a stronger structure and focus than it does now, and with doing this you'll be able to have more imagery that doesn't hop from thing to thing as much.

I hope I helped and have a great day! Keep writing.

Heya, KaiRyu! Casanova here to do a review for you! I'll be breaking this up into sections and reviewing them that way, so I hope you don't mind. To the review!

I am From

I am from three loops

Never ending and perfectly equal.

And where they come together,

There is me

Happy and content

In the center

Where they all come together.

I am from high up in the air

looking down to the valley below

with the wind whistling

through my hair.

Leaves flutter in the wind

catching them on every end.

I am from sparkling ocean waters

and the hot beach sand

where waves crash

along the shore.

While spicy chicken and crumbling bread,

sprinkle onto the ground below.

I am from Japanese music

and pages where I can go anywhere

black lines on a white paper

words and drawings filling up

those blank pages

in a Neverending Story.

I am from “a place so full of mystery.”

Where people fly on eagles wings.

I had to write this thing for a project this year, these things are god awful.

Oh! I wrote one of these a couple years ago! That was a fun project. Though I made mine when I was much younger, so it isn't half as good as this one.