Paint

KBaby211 wrote:
(Hey there KBaby! I'm June and I'm to be your reviewer today. I liked this poem; it was short, sweet, and not too cliche. I think it just lacked a bit of punctuation. Here are my nitpicks, suggestions, and comments; )

My Life is a canvas(; )
Your Love is my paint(.)

I stuck some punctuation in there . I would suggest making the "L" in love lowercase.

Let your brush stroke me(; )
I'm open and blank(.)

Every time you say"I Love You"(,)
It's Paints a little More(.)

Keep your "p" in paints lowercase.

I love the way it feels(; )
The feeling submurges me(.)

"submurges" should be spelled, "submerges"

I long for those days(; )
Those Beautiful Days (,)

The repetition of "Those" doesn't suit very well here... perhaps change one to "the".

The Days you say "I Love You"(; )
Those Days I love so much(.)

keep you "D's" in "day" lowercase.

oooh... I loved it, especially the parts with the canvas similies ( I paint ^^) . It really gave me the feeling of happy love. At the end it slowed down a little, but I don't feel that it messed the poem up... keep writing, its so easy reviewing your poems!^^

My Life is a canvas

Your Love is my paint


Let your brush stroke me

I'm open and blank


Every time you say"I Love You"

It's Paints a little More


I love the way it feels

The feeling submurges me


I long for those days

Those Beautiful Days


The Days you say "I Love You"

Those Days I love so much

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