I will be quick
The time is short
And so are my legs.
They sent someone
to get a stool
And a longer rope.
So now I have a little time
To tell the tale
Of why I am to be hanged.
You see,
We were hungry
May and me
We snuck into the bakery.
Cake and Bread
Warm and fed
Until the Baker heard.
Dark was the room
And quiet were we
Then he stubbed his toe.
May giggled,
He grabbed a knife
I dove to the rescue.
So big was he
So small was I
He knocked me down
I thought I'd die
Then he tripped and fell.
Trapped like a squirrel
beneath a tree
his blood spilled upon me.
His wife saw and screamed.
So now,
The stool has come
The rope lengthened
The hangman seems unsure,
He’s never hung a kid before.
They set me up.
They knock me down.
I sway, I sway, I sway.
May screams,
But wouldn’t you know?
The rope won’t tighten right,
I guess my body is too light.
So now you know,
How a heartless world
Decided to spare my life.
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Hello, @Justlittleoleme2! I'm Vilnius, here to review your work, even though it's not likely you'll see it.
This is a dark and detailed piece of historical fiction. I'd personally have to guess that this would've happened pre-Revolution in America, likely New England or rural New York.
This poem was thought-provoking. I thought about other hangings and deaths throughout history, particularly the Salem Witch Trials. You've done a great job of connecting your words to the genre it's set in.
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it's my first time writing a review , so here it is . your poem is extremely well written. but having a few commas and periods would have made his poem more beautiful. commas and periods are important drivers of a poem .Otherwise it would be just like reading a paragraph. The way you have portrayed the scene it's brilliant .
" how heartless world ,
Decided ,
to spare my life.
here my life would have been a little more stressed , showing its importance to the reader.
A decent piece of work indeed , keep it up!!
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I personally found this poem very well done and very thought inducing. I found it relatively simple story but it held itself together very well while carrying a large message with it. I am not very good with reviews and neither am I with grammar and punctuation but I feel there could have been a few more commas and or periods, not many were needed however. I really enjoyed this and there wasn't many if any things I found wrong with this.
Also I love rhyming...
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This is an awesome poem. The way your phrases go together, but also portray the speaker. I just really love this poem. It's so unique and, for some reason, actually makes you think. I personally don't have a lot of growth areas for you, but that could be because i'm just so in love with the piece. Great work here, huge fan of your work.
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