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They've gone to get a Stool

by Justlittleoleme2


I will be quick

The time is short

And so are my legs.

They sent someone

to get a stool

And a longer rope.

So now I have a little time

To tell the tale

Of why I am to be hanged.

You see,

We were hungry

May and me

We snuck into the bakery.

Cake and Bread

Warm and fed

Until the Baker heard.

Dark was the room

And quiet were we

Then he stubbed his toe.

May giggled,

He grabbed a knife

I dove to the rescue.

So big was he

So small was I

He knocked me down

I thought I'd die

Then he tripped and fell.

Trapped like a squirrel

beneath a tree

his blood spilled upon me. 

His wife saw and screamed.

So now, 

The stool has come

The rope lengthened

The hangman seems unsure,

He’s never hung a kid before.

They set me up.

They knock me down.

I sway, I sway, I sway.

May screams,

But wouldn’t you know?

The rope won’t tighten right,

I guess my body is too light.

So now you know,

How a heartless world

Decided to spare my life.


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Maro wrote a review...



it's my first time writing a review , so here it is . your poem is extremely well written. but having a few commas and periods would have made his poem more beautiful. commas and periods are important drivers of a poem .Otherwise it would be just like reading a paragraph. The way you have portrayed the scene it's brilliant .

" how heartless world ,
Decided ,
to spare my life.

here my life would have been a little more stressed , showing its importance to the reader.
A decent piece of work indeed , keep it up!! :)






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Frinderman wrote a review...



I personally found this poem very well done and very thought inducing. I found it relatively simple story but it held itself together very well while carrying a large message with it. I am not very good with reviews and neither am I with grammar and punctuation but I feel there could have been a few more commas and or periods, not many were needed however. I really enjoyed this and there wasn't many if any things I found wrong with this.

Also I love rhyming...

Have a great day!






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This is an awesome poem. The way your phrases go together, but also portray the speaker. I just really love this poem. It's so unique and, for some reason, actually makes you think. I personally don't have a lot of growth areas for you, but that could be because i'm just so in love with the piece. Great work here, huge fan of your work.






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