Young Writers Society

Hello, @Justlittleoleme2! I'm Vilnius, here to review your work, even though it's not likely you'll see it.

This is a dark and detailed piece of historical fiction. I'd personally have to guess that this would've happened pre-Revolution in America, likely New England or rural New York.

This poem was thought-provoking. I thought about other hangings and deaths throughout history, particularly the Salem Witch Trials. You've done a great job of connecting your words to the genre it's set in.

Have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!!!

it's my first time writing a review , so here it is . your poem is extremely well written. but having a few commas and periods would have made his poem more beautiful. commas and periods are important drivers of a poem .Otherwise it would be just like reading a paragraph. The way you have portrayed the scene it's brilliant .

" how heartless world ,
Decided ,
to spare my life.

here my life would have been a little more stressed , showing its importance to the reader.
A decent piece of work indeed , keep it up!!

I personally found this poem very well done and very thought inducing. I found it relatively simple story but it held itself together very well while carrying a large message with it. I am not very good with reviews and neither am I with grammar and punctuation but I feel there could have been a few more commas and or periods, not many were needed however. I really enjoyed this and there wasn't many if any things I found wrong with this.

Also I love rhyming...

Have a great day!

This is an awesome poem. The way your phrases go together, but also portray the speaker. I just really love this poem. It's so unique and, for some reason, actually makes you think. I personally don't have a lot of growth areas for you, but that could be because i'm just so in love with the piece. Great work here, huge fan of your work.