Published August 31, 2026
Chapter 2: Alex
Before he can say anything else, a voice calls out. "Hey! Wait up!"
The spell breaks instantly. Cal steps back, the space between us feeling cold and distant. I turn to see Lucy jogging across the hallway, her blonde ponytail bouncing. In a sea of groggy, gray-clad teenagers, Lucy is a ray of sunshine. She's wearing a pristine white sweater and has a brilliant smile that usually makes my chest tighten in the best way possible.
Today though, my chest is already occupied by a messy tangle of adrenaline, and whatever just happened with Cal.
"Hey, Alex. Hey, Cal." Lucy says, coming to a stop in front of us. She smells like cinnamon and vanilla, completely overpowering the smell of Cal's black coffee. She notices the dark circles under my eyes and immediately reaches out to touch my arm. "Alex, you look exhausted. Are you okay? I texted you this morning but you didn't reply.
"Yeah, fine, just had a rough night," I say, offering a weak smile. I feel Cal stiffen beside me.
"Another nightmare?" She asks, her blue eyes clouding with genuine worry. She steps closer, her touch shifting on my arm to gently squeezing my hand. She knows about the dreams too, but while Cal offers a quiet comfort, Lucy tries to fix it. "You know you can always talk to me, right? Even at four in the morning. I'll be there."
"I know, Luce, thanks."
Cal clears his throat and looks down, studying his coffee cup. "First period starts in two minutes." He says, his voice flat. He turns away and starts walking down the hall, away from us.
"Wait, Cal" I say, reaching out to him.
Lucy keeps her hand on my arm, her eyes wide and soft as she watches Cal walk. "Is he okay?"
I don't know. I look at the empty space where he was standing just seconds ago. Without him, the space feels cold and distant. The air still smells like his bitter coffee, even with Lucy still standing here.
"Yeah, he's just tired," I lie.
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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the wretched S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - Lucy asks Alex is she’s okay. She’s not and Lucy knows that, so Lucy lets her know that she will always be there just as Cal leaves. Alex thanks her, but still, her heart is empty.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as of right now, but if you would like to edit this, you may.
Chocolate Bar - I love that Alex describes Lucy as representing sunshine when she walks in and how she’d normally be happy to see her, but not after that moment with Cal was interrupted and when Lucy tries to help her with the nightmare. Lucy clearly cares about her, but she still doesn’t get it.
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a lovely chapter to this story! I have enjoyed reading this and I will be certain to read the other chapter tomorrow. I hope Alex will be okay and now…
I wish you a dazzling day/night! ^v^
Thank you! I look forward to writing with you, and reading more of YOUR stories! Also, the next chapter is coming out tonight, stay tuned!
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Hi, I just reviewed your other one, but I would love to say how much I love this part...
Great Job!
Thank you!
Hey, yall, I was planning on just posting one chapter a day. However, today is National Matchmaker Day! Therefore, in the spirit of love, I'm posting chapter 3 in an hour. Tune into my blog for more updates! 🥀