Hi, Ollie here! Let's get right into it.
What hides in the text I send?
Everyone reads the same but hears it
in a dozen different voices.
Really liked this bit here. It conveys to me that even though a text may be interpreted countless ways, no one but the sender/writer will know the true intended meaning behind it.
There a lie is a lie
and everyone will find out,
here a lie is clever: Here a lie will win the day.
This does a great job of illustrating what is meant by the title.
I want to learn to sew.
I want to find my way to bridge these informations,
thread a line between my black and gray masks. Hammer out the
white, make the gray.
My only problem with this is how jarring the shift is in subject matter. You go straight from examples of different masks to a seemingly unrelated topic, with no transition. I had to reread the end of the poem to make sense of it. That, and the line 'anecdotal reigns supreme' threw me off.
Other than that, this was interesting to read! I really enjoyed it.
Keep writing,
- Oliver
Points: 88
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