Grim

by Jonny

Published November 4, 2008

Humans become monsters

Today I watch one of them

He does not know

He does not fear

But the process

Begins now

OBVIOUS OBSERVATION -TODAY IS DAY ONE

He wakes up

Brushes his teeth

Goes to work

ANOTHER OBVIOUS OBSERVATION- HE IS NORMAL

Tomorrow he will wake up

Brush his teeth

Go to work

PATIENCE- GREAT VIRTUE

But the day after tomorrow

Man is late for work

Teeth not brushed in a morning rush

RHYMING- UNINTENDED

I DON’T HAVE TIME FOR WORD GAMES

He is late again tomorrow

Then again

Man is angry

Alarm clock is broken

ALARM CLOCK- BROKEN

QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY

Goes into store

Man buys another

ALARM CLOCK- BROKEN

QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY

Angry now

So I watch

He will not buy another

He will be late

Man is scolded again

He does not care

MAN = SILLY

He

Gets

Fired

He

Gets

Angry

MONSTER-NESS - RISING

To support his family

He tries to find

Someplace else

That wants him

NO ONE WANTS MAN

QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY

But how does the bacon get home

First a wallet

But not his of course

YOU ARE STARTING TO LEARN

The money reeks of guilt

But its feels nice

Next stop is a store

But not his

He holds the gun

It feels like cold chocolate

He gets food

His family eats

OBJECT OF IMPORTANCE- GUN

Many more second stops

Man realizes

This is how it is supposed to be

MONSTER-NESS - RISING

Gun feels like chocolate

It is sticky

ACTUAL GUN STICKYNESS- LOW

His family eats

But then there are no more stores to steal from

And he is being watched

He knows it

The people watching him know it

They will find him

THEY ACTUALLY HAVE NO CLUE

QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY

He runs

Run Monster run

He is being watched

He does not go outside

His family does not eat

MONSTER WILL BE REAL MONSTER SOON

His family leaves

They are not being watched

They are not Monster

They forget him

In time

As with all things

HUMANS = SILLY

They were Monster’s purpose in life

MAN MINUS EVERYTHING = MONSTER

Monster starves alone

He kills another for food

The one he killed had no food

MONSTER- THOUGHT IT TASTED NICE

For a purpose he reads the bible

He is a sinner

He finds ways to hurt himself

MONSTER PHILOSOPHY

PAIN INSIDE > PAIN OUTSIDE

MONSTER = NOT THAT BRIGHT

Monster kills another man

He descends the stairwell to savagery

All because of an alarm clock

Brilliant, huh?

SORRY

OUT OF CONTEXT

I WILL CONTINUE

Man finds Monster

Man laughs

He beats himself

He is no longer a human

Laugh

LAUGH

HERE IS A STORY OF MONSTERS LIFE

He was a good man

Alarm clock

Got fired

Man wasn’t wanted

QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY

What to do

Rob a store

The gun felt sticky

So he didn’t let go

Then he realized he was a dead man

HE WAS NOT

PURPOUSEFULLY

Then he became a monster

Now he reads the bible

Hurts himself

Prays for death

He is nothing now

THEN I COME

END HIS LIFE

HIS SOUL TASTES LIKE RED

MONSTER IS NOW NO MORE

I DO THIS FOR A REASON

BECAUSE AS MENTIONED BEFOREHAND

HUMAN = SILLY

MAYBE YOU’LL LEARN

AND I’LL BE OUT OF A JOB

BUT NO

I KNOW

ALL HUMANS ARE SIMPILY MONSTERS

FROM PRIMAL TIMES

DESCEND DOWN TO THE HELL YOU CAME FROM

YOU ARE BETTER THERE

I SHOULD WRITE A STORY

AND GIVE IT TO YOU HUMANS

AND START IT WITH

Humans become monsters

SO MAYBE YOU’LL ALL JUST DIE

SO I CAN SIT AROUND ALL DAY

HUMANS BECOME MONSTERS

HUMANS BECOME NOTHING

HUMANS GO BACK TO THE HELL FROM WHICH YOU CAME

IT ALL COMES IN TIME

LAUGH

Comments & reviews · 3
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Light_Devil
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Light_Devil commented Comment · Nov 5, 2008

^^

You were right!

I did enjoy this thoroughly. ^^

It was interesting.

I'd like it, not much to critique, it's all mostly spelled right, so all in all.

THIS=GOOD

^^

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Carlito
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Carlito wrote a review Review · Nov 4, 2008

ooooo, I really like this!

I've never seen anything written like this before and I thought it was really well done. Kind of weird, but really well done.
I liked the short, blunt, to the point sentences.
The end part kind of confused me though, when it starts with "THEN I COME".

I really liked it though, gold star for you! :D

-Carly



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