Starstruck

Hi there,
Pony123 here to review.

I really liked how you used the large vocabulary, but made it seem like little kid words.
I also like the second line. You put in the character's feelings.

A few edits you can make:

"A forced pushed us" Should be "A force pushed us"

"I’m watching him smile in perfection.

We’re both looking as if we’ve known each other

I just can’t help to stop our mutual connection. "

The "Smile in perfection" and "mutual connection"
lines have different rhythm. It stopped the flow of the poem.

Overall, good job, I can't wait to see more!

Keep Writing,
Pony123

good. the sentece stucture and ryhme scheme is wonderful.

Hey there hopeless here to review your poem!!

Ok so let's jump into it, I would like to start off that this is a great poem just a few things I would like to point out. Your spelling is just fine so is your grammar but your punctuation could use some work. Maybe fix up on that, though it is your poem and you can do what you want with it. It's not my call. And now for the poem it's self, it's an amazing little thing it is. I love it, I love the little story it has in it good job. I say bravo to how it's short an days a lot in it. That's all I saw in it though, I can't see anything else I wanted to point out. So I guess that is it. Great job!

Keep writing and stay beautiful!'

~hopeless