Just because its in the title doesn't mean it has to be in the poem.
Also: this does a lot of telling. Even though there are scenes and things happen and it is a little more than generalization, I go through the motions of being wobbly/afraid without actually getting a sense of that from the word choice or other metaphors. Wording like "resolution is reached" is especially weak, because it sounds like something from a legal brief. Where does the resolution come from? What is it like? How does the resolution in the music mirror the resolution of a life [what kind of music is it, anyway? the descriptions of it are a little vague and contradictory and mechanical.] Details are key to making a poem fresh and interesting to the reader.
Points: 890
Reviews: 91
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