Published June 23, 2011
A ticking bomb ready to explode.
A balloon so filled it could burst.
An overwhelming feeling at the pit of my stomach
Adrenaline rushing to my every vein
Dangerous thoughts cross my mind,
But I try not to listen.
Heavy breathing.
Silent tears.
I try to find my way,
But I'm walking around in circles
Repeating the cycles of my agony.
Physical pain no longer hurts,
But silently suffers.
My feeling are numb,
But my heart is breaking.
I try to have faith,
But how long till it's over?
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I liked the poem, it was good, and I could feel the agony you were describing.
This should be my feelings are numb or my feeling is numb. I liked how the first two lines are short sentences, it makes the poem almost uncomfortable to read and adds to the general aura of the poem. And in the second two lines you have no puntuation, maybe you could add some there? Anyway, great job. Even if you leave it exactly how it is, I like it.thank you. I appreciate it [=
Hi there! I really like your poem! It's a meaningful poem. I really like it! Awesome job and keep it up!
- gleek456 <3
Alright. I put in the question mark. lols
I like the colorful bottom part. Very cool.
BTW, thanks for the comment.
This is a very moving, meaningful poem. is the last sentance a question or not? Just wondering, because when I write a question without a question mark everyones like "QUESTION MARK!!!!! ARRRRGH! PUT ONE IN NOW, GIRL!" and it's like o.O.
It's kind of like a question statement. I don't know if you follow me here because it's hard to explain. Anyways thanks for liking my poem. I appreciate the comment.
The last line is a question, isn't it? anyways, great poem. I can relate to it. *hits like button* Anyways, very good. And very meaningful.