It is sitting here alone that it hits me.
Like a bird has flown into my chest, hitting me hard, but letting its wings flutter lightly:
Love.
That insatiable, unquenched thirst for more.
Always more.
You do not realize how much more I always want your love.
I do not understand how something so intangible can be so strong:
Love.
Leaving me wanting more with every second I spend with you that passes.
Always more.
Almost like a puppet show, the strings attached to my heart.
Pulling and tugging – left, right, left, right:
Love.
Connected to my feelings for you, wanting to be pulled more.
Always more.
Every breath I take, I breathe for you.
I live for you, for what I hope is in store for the future:
Love.
But things have changed, I breathe harder now, wanting to take in more of your love.
Always more.
Like yin and yang, positive and negative, north and south, that is how we are.
Moving in unison, keeping energies equal, balancing one another:
Love.
To make you happy forever, depression is a price I would gladly pay, to bottle up inside to never touch your beautiful spirit again, and instead give you more of my love.
Always more.
And should there come a day when you no longer wish for my presence,
I shall stand off in the shadows, to wait for you to want me once more:
Love.
And should you never want me again, I will live my life alone, eternally grateful for the time we shared, never in regret, but with a smile and love.
Forever, and for always more.
Hi, just here to review your work. Okay it was a nice poem and there were parts that I really enjoyed. There were also parts I didn't but I will get into those later.
Ok the good stuff. You have good emotion and it really makes me keep reading. It is a simple poem in it's choice of words and you pull it of well. It has good figurative language etc.
The not so good stuff.
Ok so it is at times a bit repetitive. For example the use of "love" and "always more" gets a bit boring and tiring. If you just repeat one of those lines it would be fine but two just gets boring.
I feel that you need to break up some of the sentences, I like how you have some long sentences and some short but some of them go on a bit. Try breaking them up a bit for example
this line could be tried like this.
It only makes it a bit shorter but you still keep those emotional words. It is up to you though as it is a really good poem and a wonderful free verse.
I did really enjoy it a lot so keep it up!!
Nargles xx
Thank you!
I appreciate your opinion. 
I know it needs something done with the bottom... Too many commas, even for me. I'll see what I can do when I have to time to sit quietly and think about it.
Wonderful! Excellent choice of words, with sublime flow..Really touching. It kept me wanting for more...Always more
Keep up the good work, chip in more!
Thank you