[pre] Have you heard the phrase, "Walk a mile in each other shoes?" Well what if you did some how you mysteriously swapped minds with another person? Would you rather of become a celebrity, an average worker, or a child who lives on the streets of a foreign country? Most, would say the celebrity, I would say the kid. Think of those who are not as fortunate as you. That kid, is probably dying, and does not even know when his last meal was. Does the celebrity know when his/her last meal was? You know they do, and you probably do as well.
Take the phrase walk a mile in each others shoes, literally. When you see someone who needs help, help them. If you have extra money, donate it. But not to a celebrity's fund, to a place who would help that young boy to stay off the streets.
Now, try walking in the celebrity's shoe, and the girls, probably have millions. Some donate, while others spend it away. Would you be that celebrity? The one who thinks they are perfect, and does not even care about that kid on the streets.
Lastly, step into the average worker's shoes. This is the one category most of the world's population can relate most to. But just remember, while you blow up over a few things going wrong in your life, it pales in comparison to what someone else is going through. as your world falls apart, someone else's world already has. So look at what you really need, help others, and always know someone is having a much worse day than you.
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"Walk a mile in each other shoes?" - Is that really the phrase? It doesn't even sound like proper English. Redo the second sentence. Would most really want to be a celebrity (I wouldn't; you wouldn't)?
Re-write, re-write, re-write - then tell me about it. I'm serious. Let me know when you've taken a good look - and then a couple more good looks at it - and tell me.
Good point! I definitely see where you are coming from.... Little errors need to be taken care of though........
Here is my critique:
Have you heard the phrase, "Walk a mile in each other shoes?"
Well what if you did some how you mysteriously swapped minds with another person?
Should be: "What if you did somehow mysteriously swap minds with another person?"Would you rather of become a celebrity, an average worker, or a child who lives on the streets of a foreign country?
Most, would say the celebrity, I would say the kid.
That kid, is probably dying, and does not even know when his last meal was.
Take the phrase walk a mile in each others shoes, literally. When you see someone who needs help, help them.
Now, try walking in the celebrity's shoe, and the girls, probably have millions.
The one who thinks they are perfect, and does not even care about that kid on the streets.
as your world falls apart, someone else's world already has.
Jeni wrote:[pre] Have you heard the phrase, "Walk a mile in each other shoes?" Well, what if you did? [s]s[/s]Some how you mysteriously swapped minds with another person? Would you rather [s]of[/s] become a celebrity, an average worker, or a child who lives on the streets of a foreign country? Most[s],[/s] would say the celebrity, I would say the kid. Think of those who are not as fortunate as you. That kid[s],[/s] is probably dying[s],[/s] and does not even know when his last meal was. Does the celebrity know when his/her last meal was? You know they do, and you probably do as well.
Take the phrase walk a mile in each others shoes, literally. When you see someone who needs help, help them. If you have extra money, donate it. But not to a celebrity's fund, to a place who would help that young boy to stay off the streets.
Now, try walking in the celebrity's shoes[s], and the girls[/s], they probably have millions. Some donate, while others spend it away. Would you be that celebrity? The one who thinks they are perfect, and does not even care about that kid on the streets.
Lastly, step into the average worker's shoes. This is the one category most of the world's population can relate most to. But just remember, while you blow up over a few things going wrong in your life, it pales in comparison to what someone else is going through. as your world falls apart, someone else's world already has. So look at what you really need, help others, and always know someone is having a much worse day than you.
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