Invisible

OMG AND IN THE SPOTLIGHT!! NUMBER ONE!! CONGRATS!!

Hey, Jasmine!!

So, not much to review. I just wanted to say that I feel the need to review your stuff.

Anyway, I love this. Its simple and to the point. I have found no problems!! I love this about as much as I love youu!

If you are on here tonight, I want you to please answer me. Are you or your mom mad at me? Please try to email or text me before the party tomorrow though!!

Thanks! You're awesome. Love ya, Jazzy!!

Keep writing!!,
~Tiff

Congrats Jasmine!

I feel that this can have solo many layers! Great job too because you only just joined yesterday! Extra points for that! Ok, now for some changes...

I feel that the idea was creative, and you could do more with it... Most of what you did, you just stated thing that were "invisible".

I feel that you could have dine things a little different, like just focused more on like, your imagination being invisible, and not on other things like just plastic. I think that was a little out of place. It may just be me though...

Now in line two, why that? I think that instead of using 'taste' you should use like- feeling, or something, just not like that. Sorry if I am sounding negative, but I am being honest.

Hope some of this helps! Congrats on being #1 !

Well, to start with, this is actually pretty simple, but yet really meaningful. I liked the part where you described the whole thing as invisible, as about you have mentioned, pretty much almost everything is invisible. Sometimes, I actually think that 'why can I not see what I really want to see?' Well you have mentioned it! Pretty much everything in our minds are invisible.

I really liked the poem. Yes, I loved the whole part. But the part when you kept on repeating the same word over and over again, which is of course, as you can tell, the word 'invisible.' And a repetition is never good. But, you wanted it that way so I really do not mind.

Nice poem.

Hello First off, I really liked this poem. I got the feeling that you were trying to convey the most important things are, in fact, invisible. I think because you name good qualities/things that are so important they don't have a price to it, for example your soul or imagination. Or maybe I'm just completely not even close to what you were trying to say :p
I really liked the line: 'Your imagination is invisible' because to me, my imagination is a string of words/idea or pictures which I see or think so it seems solid, but it is invisible and that's something I never really though about before. :p
Thank you for sharing this

Short, sweet and to the point

IT could use a bit of spice, but not to distract from the monotone dark view of the piece.
I also found the repetition of invisible quite necessary, so expanding or elaborating is unnecessary
but it did seem to cause a bit of a drag on.

I loved it! Short and Simple