Thank you all for your advice and reviews! I appreciate it more than you know. I really need to get better at "setting up a surrounding" as I've been told, because I kind of get caught up in the action of the scene, that my descriptions seem to take a hit from it. I'll definitely work on this for further chapters. Again, thank you so much for your advice. And L5na2, as I'm sure you're aware, I MISS THE HELL OUT OF YOU. Just stated the obvious . Thanks again!

Spidey Here.
Before I say my overall thoughts, i'm going to nitpick.

The African man was standing against the warm bark of the tree in the heart of the African plain where he lived as he spoke.

A young woman, somewhere around the age of twenty-one, stood before him. She had black spirals for hair, bouncing lightly across her shoulders. Her white sundress brightened her complexion completely, lightening her purple eyes with a vibrancy that spelled caution and mystique. She inadvertedly played with her blue sandals with her toes, seeming somewhat anxious.

As you know I love your stories. I miss seeing and reading your stuff.

Hi
This is amazing, I really like it. You've got a fantastic idea for an entertaining story,I thoroughly enjoyed reading your work. There are a few points in the piece which don't quite flow as they should, but i'll leave them to you to find. It seems to me as if you've got this all plannedwhich is brilliant, but I think you are intent on getting through the story. If you want this to become even better,and it will,you need to add more description and build the characters, tell us how they feel, look, what they can smell, tell us every little detail so that we become immersed in the story, we want to become a part of it. I know that you can do that, so write the story as you are first, so that you know what happens and then put the flesh on it, all those details that make it really good, instead of just good.
Anyway, great job, keep writing and I know that this could be really great.
Easilyinspired xxx