Published August 30, 2012
Her life an endless rollercoster a few moments in light and goodness but the rest down in a deep dark abyss. Hatred aimes for her. She wishes to die. To die is what she wants for hatred has consumed her life. Is there no end to this ride. Hate is worse then death she thinks as she fades into darkness. Into darkness she fades never to be seen or heard again. People do not see her go into the darkness gone for good. People laugh, people cry, but few people ride the rollercoster of hate, even fewer servive.
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Well, there's a lot of errors. I think they are obvious, so I'm not even going to point them out. The story itself... well, this is not a story, at least from the narratological point of view. And, even if it were, it doesn't have anything memorable, nothing unique. It's just a very poor description of what hate is.