Published November 20, 2010
As the world raises in its methods of its survival, it plummets into its own undoing.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Okay...so this is perhaps the second one of its kind that I've ever encountered and reviewed on YWS. It not often that you run into one sentence stories, and this one actually doesn't even seem to explicitly be one of those but well it is one sentence and its in the story category, so I'm gonna review it that way.
The first thing that strikes me is the title. That almost sounds like the sort of name you'd have on a book meant to instruct beginners of how and how not to use magic or something like that and in the story itself magic isn't referenced but if you try to align the two in context you can sort of see a meaning coming out.
At its most literal form, this sentence appears to tell us that humanity's methods of survival as they get ever more advanced end up causing its own destruction and linking it to the title, it seems to have a connection perhaps in how humanity discovered and used it in incorrect and ultimately destructive ways that caused this.
As a whole, this actually is a fairly interesting sentence once you analyze it properly in depth. Overall, well I had fun try to decipher something out this so I'd say good job
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Really? Where is it? The actuall story telling I mean. Do you really plan to get anything out of a one sentence thing? Seriously, you really need to post something! Let me tell you, I clicked on The Ins and Outs of Magic anticipating to read a good fantasy story. You do have an amazing title and all, but you need the key component, the actual story. You are so not going to be getting anything out of this! Listen to me and post the story on here so people wont make the same mistake I made when I clicke on it and so they will not, at all, be disappointed at what they find! Add something to it! I am SERIOUS! Add the actual story!
Wow, that's true. But short!
Keep Writing!
Nike
PS-is it a slogan, words of meaning?
Ok you have a good title, good opening but where's everything else? Please most more.
That is very true. Also very short.
You really need to give people more to review when you post stuff.