Published April 24, 2011
I'm aware that is isn't finished. But I just want some advice/feedback thanks guys 
Terrible one, terrible two, terrible three, terrible four,
Wishing is done, nothing for you, nothing for me, at the door.
You don’t understand me but I know what I’m saying today,
I don’t understand you but I know that you see your own way.
Get over it, get on with your life.
Get over it, you cant fix your strife.
Just move on, be hap-py as can be,
Just move on, you can deal without me.
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Sounds great
Simplistic but pretty effective xXx
Great start so far
i like the ryhtym of the words you've got going and i really like the second line so continue writing it and well done!