Hello there,
I like the optimistic, happy voice that is so present throughout this short piece. There is not a hint of negativity, even when the speaker considers whether she was abandoned by her biological family, and that's kind of refreshing and nice.
I feel like I'd like to see more development of her parents' characters through her eyes. Like, I wonder how they feel when they plant the amaryllis in her room because she stayed out all day looking at it. Are they still just thankful to have any child at all, or are they worried because the child they ended up with is doing something normal children wouldn't? I know the story mentions that her mother planted amaryllis all around, and that also makes me wonder is the mother planting for her daughter or kind of like a thank-you note to whoever/whatever the mother thinks helped these events to occur? How does her father feel?
The other place I think clarification could help would be when you mention "the forest". What forest? The forest outside their house? The forest outside the town? How far away is it? How do the townspeople think about it?
Finally, there was just a bit of grammatical confusion in the last paragraph here:
I say that nature is my other mother, even if it ends up been a random woman that abandoned me. And I genuinely feel that she is connected to me.
Right now, the "she" in the second sentence refers to "a random woman that abandoned me" rather than "nature". You can fix this just by saying "nature" again!
I hope these thoughts were helpful to you! If you have any questions/comments about my review, please PM me or reply here.
Thanks for sharing,
Hannah
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