Published October 22, 2005
A crow blinked . Opals.
Eyes snap shut in a white flash,
Open. I am gone.
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I read it as cow, too. The only part I don't understand is the reference to opals.
For a second, I thought it said cow, and it was soooooo funny... but then I reread it. XD
Even so, interesting imagery.
I like the imagery. Ah, fleeting life. By bringing up the crow, are you alluding to Native American mythology and the crows role in the life and death? Or is that just me?
I could be wrong, but I don't think Haiku is supposed to have punctuation.
Wait a minute, is this a haiku? Okay, it's all coming together now. I see what's going on. I think I do get it.
This is a style of poem that I never did understand. But I suppose I don't have to. I mean, not everyone is going to "get" everything... I guess what I'm trying to say is that if I don't understand you poem, it's my failing and not yours. You know, now that I think about it, it reminds me of the poems that beat nicks would read while playing the bongos. Not to say that your a beat nick.
Em, I don't really understand this very well. Em, good work, though.