Hi!
A good poem - but I think to hit the full intended effect, refining it could be very beneficial. For example:
Staring into the glass mirror,
The feeling just hits me,
I look at other girls,
But at least I cry pretty,
Ugly,
Awful,
I just wanna feel normal.
Obviously this depends what the intended effect is for this poem - it's your work so please, do not feel obliged to undergo these edits. But this poem can have vast potential.
You're a good writer which much poential, so please carry on
Sunlightwarriorxo
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