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11. It's Not Over Yet

by IceWinifredd


By IceWinifredd©

“It's Not Over Yet”

(Introduction)

Let me try to explain

You see, some people choose to smile

and pretend that everything's okay

Whereas, others hold back their tears

and decide to walk away...

(Verse 1)

Not all scars will show, not all wounds will heal

'cause you can't see the pain someone might feel

Never hold you tears so you better cry

Never give up so you better try

Never settle for no if you still wanna know

Never say never if you won't let it go...

(Chorus)

Don't you worry, it's not over yet

For things will get tougher the closer you get

You'll get to a point where things will get worse

so remember that life is a gift and not a curse

so strive with patience and love, not hatred and gore

for you're an angel and so much more

destined to shine forevermore...

(Verse 2)

Everybody's got problems, whether their big or small

it's important to believe that you'll get through it all

You've got the good with the bad, smiles for the sad

So love what you've got, never forget what you had

Better to forgive and never forget

that we all make mistakes, so learn and never regret

(Chorus)

Don't you worry, it's not over yet

for things will get tougher the closer you get

You'll get to a point where things will get worse

so remember that life is a gift and not a curse

so strive with patience and love, not hatred and gore

for you're an angel and so much more

destined to shine forevermore...

(Verse 3)

Believe that things happen for a reason

So cease your chance, like a shift of season

'Cause when you do, there will be a change

It'll change you completely, it'll change your life

And when it does, Thank God and let it happen...

(bridge)

Everybody wants happiness,

nobody wants pain

but you can't have a rainbow

without some rain

(Chorus)

Don't you worry, it's not over yet

for things will get tougher the closer you get

You'll get to a point where things will get worse

so remember that life is a gift and not a curse

so strive with patience and love, not hatred and gore

for you're an angel and so much more

destined to shine forevermore...

(Outro)

Nobody ever said that it was going to be easy

they just promised it would be worth it

So take a breath and count to three

let this new-found happiness set you free...


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Tue Jul 21, 2015 8:23 pm
Rumi wrote a review...



This is really nice, actually just the sort of thing I needed to hear right now! I like how it's structured with an intro and outro in addition to the verses and chorus. My only suggestion is that some of the words seem a little too formal for a song from the heart. Like in the intro "whereas" instead of a word like "while" that would be more naturally spoken. And in the chorus, "gore" doesn't really fit, first because it's not really an emotion like the other three words in the sentence, and second because it's not really the kind of word someone would say off the top of their head when they're trying to comfort someone. I think your song will have the most power for connecting to listeners when it has words that seem natural instead of artificially constructed.




IceWinifredd says...


Hello RumiJohnson!

Thanks for coming by and reading. The comment is very well appreciated. I hadn't noticed that until I re-read it just now and I think you're right. I'll go back and edit the lyrics a bit so they sound more natural. I have more lyrics if you want to check them out. I would love to know what you think of the others. Have an amazing day and happy writing! -IceWinifredd



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Sat Jul 18, 2015 6:09 pm
erilea wrote a review...



Hey, IceWinifredd! Wise dropping in for a review. Songs aren't usually published, and it's nice to see one!

My first suggestion is that you put the names of the sections in italics. It distinguishes them more and makes it a little less like the text. I usually do that.

Apart from that, there are no other nitpicks! As I finished reading this, the first thought I had was "Wow." And I didn't go out of my mind or crazy. This piece was insanely good. I think it beats all of my songs by far and wide. The rhyme was amazing and it all flowed beautifully, made perfect sense and I was almost humming the tune that fit with this piece at one time. You did wonderful on this song. I can't say anymore. Good job and keep writing!

-wisegirl22




IceWinifredd says...


Ello there Wisegirl22!

I'm glad you dropped by with a read and comment! I really appreciate the review! I'll go back and put the sections in italics for you. I forgot to do so before. I'm really glad you like it. I'm new to the world of song writing so I wasn't the most confident when I posted this. Your review made my day. Have an amazing day! -IceWinifredd

P.S. I'll be sure to swing by your page and check out your lyrics.



erilea says...


Thanks! And please don't. They suck. :P



IceWinifredd says...


Alright. If you insist. :)



erilea says...


It's fine. You already did. :)




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