Do you know what hurts the most,
knowing that there is hypocrisy in this world
and knowing that you are one of them.
When you promised me that something,
I have trusted you but deep down I knew
that your words were not speaking your mind,
yes your words that now I feel like a stab in my back.
Why do you pretend to be good when you are not,
Why do you judge me when your judgment to this present moment is like
nonsensical words on a piece of paper.
That day when you finally showed me your true colors
I have confirmed my naivity,
I was blinded by what you appeared to me.
You have erased that moment from your memories,
this just adds more to the person that I don't want to become;
the cut you gave me didn't heal yet,
it's still bleeding.
I must thank you for something,
you gave me a glance of what this world contains,
to believe that it's surrounded by hypocrites like you it's hard,
to believe that I would learn to hate it's hard.
One day your evilness will flood you ,
The world goes in circles,
One day someone will do wrong to you,
that day you will be alone
just like how I feel watching from an angle your act.
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Hi Thank you ... about the "you" at the start it wasn't referring to the author but the actual person, sorry I should have made it clearer. Regarding the detail of the poem, I didn't want it to be too specific, all I wanted to do was to give the idea of the way a "hypocrite" can make you feel and hopefully express with my words the actual feeling of anger ...
I loved it. I totally related to it. I don't really understand how you were also a hypocrite. Could you explain that? The other thing I wanted to say was after I read it I was left wondering what this person did to make you so upset. Personally I like specifics when I read things like this. Next time try getting into more detail and adding specific digs or nods to what they did. Great job!