Gothic the urge of limits inside
I bow for something chiming revelry
Gulping for air as hopelessness sighs in momentums of malady
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"Craziness lurks right under his neck"
"I want your cons as major alibis"
Prospects of good are relative when thy freedom comes in upper hand rights"
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Hiding beneath where innocence sings
Its grief is fed, troubling the flames! :0
"What could i do to laugh until feels are only peristaltic pains?.."
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Parallel to minor aching
Nothing's capable of taking
Aftermaths of "love thy neighbor"
Put our ethics into labor
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Loneliness kills a missing embrace for thee, like stories I have read before...
"Mr. Oh Mr. Raven...
Don't go,
Don't cry,
Don't rap at my chamber door.."
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Slave of something i created
Abstracted, compensated by delusion of the ceilings turning lightnings into feelings
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Followed by illuminati
Logic here has no binaries
Nothing is so clear, i see
I'm blinded by the ones who pray for me
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See how the nerves rings a bell (feel how the felt)
So they power up the steam
So they power up the steam
So they power up the steam till you melt
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See how the heart makes you bounce
And it turns your reason lobe into a pea :D
And it turns my reasoning into a -
s o m e o n e h e l p m e
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Understand the process to unwind my brain
Doctor, i'm between the lines of sane
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When it comes time to open yourself
it’s choice to flee or conquer a defeat
Single their words stimulate power dust
to your electrical seat
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Love, it makes you insane.
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Top Graham Cracker - A cascade of someone’s sanity spiraling down, all in the name of love and passion.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - In one verse, I think that you meant to write “feel how they felt”, but wrote “feel how the felt”. That’s only one thing, though.
Chocolate Bar - I love the Edgar Allan Poe reference! I also think that the blood drop emojis were really creative and made the poem “pop” more. It reminds me of gothic romance stories, which I enjoy reading. :>
Closing Graham Cracker - The use of different words and gothic symbolism make this an interesting read. I loved all of the ideas in it.
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The sentence and paragraph breakup added some creativity to it and so did the quotes. It was a very silly poem and a unique and creative one. I enjoyed it throughly
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Just wanna start with how much I love that last line
It really had me thinking like dangg love really does make you insane
Another thing is that the words that you use suit the poem so well
I also love how you use logic because when you compare logic and love you are so right it really does make you crazy
Please keep writing!!
-Jay