Wow. Let me just start by saying that this poem is fantastic. I am so glad that I read this because it touched me in ways I can't even fathom. I'm thrilled that you had the guts to write and to post something so real and so intensely personal. I feel like I literally just stumbled into your head and discovered a concept that I can relate to on some level even though I'm not trans.
I think that from a reader's perspective this gives clear insight on to how someone in your position feels on a day to day basis. It's so hard not feeling comfortable in your own skin and I think that anyone could read this and feel some connection to that fact alone. I think that a whole lot of people could benefit by reading this poem.
The only line that I really think could have used something extra is: "I know they have their time of month and their own problems to attend" I feel as though this is almost a little too tame in comparison to the gravity of the poem and that it could use some rewording.
The other suggestion that I can offer you is maybe to move:
"The luscious hair cascading down,
the smooth and matchless curves.
I want it all, from head to toe,
it burns like sunshine in my nerves."
to after:
"I love the way they feel and fit
and accentuate each pose."
This is only because you were originally talking about all of the physical attributes that you admire and then suddenly switch to the "time of the month" part and then return to another example of something you like.
All in all, it was a great read. I'm not usually a fan of rhyming in poetry but in this instance I think it flowed really well and I found myself head-bobbing to the beat of the words as I read them, which was a little weird seeing as how I was almost in tears. But anyway, keep up the good work and don't ever let people tell you how "you're supposed to be." Only you know what that is and at the very least you have a whole slew of cyber-buddies who have your back. 
Points: 865
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