Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
“Lady Blanche!” You blink groggily as you open your eyes. Your hand brushes against the silk sheets of the bed you lay in. Silk? You sit up hurriedly, looking down at the strange bed you find yourself in. Rose petals adorn the bed. Candles that were possibly lit the night before trace a path from the door to the place you lie in. Your bed is made of soft material and a stuffed animal lays under the sheets beside you. Along with the young man who lies half naked beside you. Huh?
You cover yourself, your cheeks burning red with embarrassment. “What are you doing in a young lady’s bed?” You say shrilly, grabbing onto the sheets and using them as cover while you retreat away from the bed. However the young man looks as bewildered as you do, looking around frantically at the room he finds himself in. He mutters, “Wasn’t I just in the Library’s Disposal room?”
Disposal room? You open your mouth to ask a question however the same voice that awoke you calls again from the door. This time filled with urgency. “Lady Blanche, hurry! Lady Del Lune is here! You need to hide Prince Trilith!” Too late. The doors slam open, the dark room filling with light…along with a silver haired woman. The young Archduchess narrowed her eyes as she looked at the scene, her tone icy as she glared at the two in bed, “What is the meaning of this Prince?”
Well this is quite the little scene here. A powerful one, and a confusing one at the same time by which I mean in the good way that we can understand the sheer confusion that everyone in this scene happens to be experiencing at this moment with what's going down here.
I love the way this pans from the simple description and then into the actual scene here. You really set up a neat little scene establishing how its all come together in terms of the feeling of the bed and the surroundings and then the sheer shock factor of precisely what is in said bed comes together incredibly well there showcasing just how confusing it is for both parties judging by that reaction that we saw there from the Prince.
And that last paragraph closes it out perfectly. The servants all seemingly aware and trying to patch up what's happening before a scandal takes place while the two of them look completely confused by it all.
Overall a wonderful way to capture this I think, its a simple scene but it stands out strongly with these little details you've managed to squeeze in. Very nicely done there!
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Kate
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