Hi Hinata2005,
Mailice here with a short review!
This was an interesting story. It had something deep and unknown in it, where you as a reader felt your way through the story and ended up as smart as before. This leaves you with a suspenseful effect. I did get a little confused at times to determine an exact meaning as I got lost at one point somewhere, but in summary it was an idea worth reading that you presented.
I liked the narrator's voice, how he always spoke in an objective stance, and how it also developed into a kind of monologue to bring the reader and the chauffeur together in thought. His choice of words, especially towards the end, was far more lively and not as frozen as at the beginning, which I liked, and also shows a clear difference between his work and how he takes it seriously.
What was also great to see in the voice was this sublime, subliminal interpretation where as a reader I sometimes knew where it was going and sometimes not. At times I thought the story was turning into some kind of horror towards the end, but I'm glad it didn't get to that point.
Look's and breathes that intrigues me
I think there's a little mistake here with "Look's".
shines from the sunroof and softly says,
"Merci"
In a French accent as she leaves
You could also put it like this: "shines from the sunroof and in a French accent she softly says". That sounds better. It seems a bit choppy and reads a bit bumpy.
palace of roses. The palace of roses
The big title and the little title call it "Palace of Roses". I would stick with that spelling. Since this is the title of the story, it should leave a lasting effect on the reader.
Have fun writing!
Mailice
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