Dear,
Arnold Grace,
I thought you’d like to know, I got your letter
I know its been a while but I
Still hadn’t answered
And I’m
terribly sorry to inform you but...
Dear Arnold Grace we grow up to be a bad bad person
We don’t make people smile or do much anything worthwhile
We do somethings that are unforgivable
And we get in trouble, we run away and make our mother cry.
I understand that thats not what you expected
We were never fond of pirates and of outlaws
In your letter you said you wanted to be cartographer
I’m sorry that that didn’t work out for you.
You really were good for your age.
Dear Arnold Grace (in the third grade)
I ruined our life and its unacceptable.
Maybe if I’d listened to you more, and followed the plans you had in store us we would’ve turned out somewhat presentable.
We were just a little kid heartfelt and innocent
Playing grownup though it was incomprehensible.
How
could you turn into me?
Did I kill you in my sleep?
When dreaming of something undetectable?
Dear Arnold Grace you grow up to be a bad bad person.
And I am entirely to blame for that
Yes, we did fall in love,
As short as it was,
She hated us more than I miss you
She stabbed us in the back- not metaphorically
and
As alarming as it was, at the time,
if it had been you
and she’d been in the third grade
I can’t but think that you would’ve loved her too.
Dear Arnold Grace. We are a bad person.
We never could make them smile
We never did make the honor roll and we never really tried.
And I think I’d like to be a cartographer
Maybe I’ll practice when they catch me next time.
After all, even pirates need their treasure maps
.
Dear Arnold Grace, in the third grade
I have some friends id like to introduce to you
Dear Arnold Grace in the third grade
And maybe you'll help them be better people too
Dear Arnold Grace, in the third grade,
I hope this letter finds you well.
...
...
Sincerely,
"future me."
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I really liked it. I have some specicions about what exactly is going on, Like did he combine with an alien and that's why it's talking and acting like that? I love stories in the form of letters there just a cool way to show maybe change and other things. I'm wondering what they mean by "And I think I'd like to be a cartographer." People hate plot holes, but these plot holes are very interesting. I loved the letter alot thanks for putting it out there!
thanks!
This is a really good take on writing letters to your past/ future self.
It was a little unclear because from the "And I think I’d like to be a cartographer
Maybe I’ll practice when they catch me next time.
After even pirates need their treasure maps" It kind of sends me the message that Arnold Grace grew up to be a pirate, but I wasn't sure lol.
Also there is this one part "After even pirates need their treasure maps" I was wondering if there should be an "after all" but that was really the only discontinuity I found in the poem.
I like the repetition of "bad bad person" it not only emphasizes the fact that it is to a past self so it is basic words, but also gives me the impression of how much Arnold Grace is struggling with the things they have done. Arnold can't even describe most of the events just that they were "bad." It also adds a huge amount of intrigue as to what they could have done that was so bad and the mention of pirates, stabbings, and outlaws emphasize that.
really great job, I really liked it!
thanks! it was supposed to be afterall, it must've gotten missed in editing thanks!