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I Gave You All That I Could

by HiddenScars16


Happy birthday
I wish you all the best
One thing I forgot to mention
I made you a gift

I wrapped it up tight
And made sure it was perfectly done up
And I put the most colourful bow right on top
And made sure it would make you smile too

I made sure to smie when I gave it to you
And to watch carefully for your reaction
But all you do is stare at me too
Smiling with that smile I can't resist

Open it
I whisper
I hope you like it
And then you tore off all the paper and stared

It maybe wasn't the best idea
But I thought it fit perfectly
And that you might not understand
Until I gave you the other piece

I don't understand
You whisper, eyes staring right through me
Why are you giving me this?
I can only manage to smile to you slowly

I haven't given you the second part of it yet
I say back
Then watch as your shock returns
And then kiss your sweet, smiling lips

I watch your eyes widen with shock
And manage to smile
Inspite of myself
Then pull softly away and smile

I want you to have it
You deserve it more then anyone else
It fits that you should have it
Because it was always yours to hold

I close your fingers around your gift lovingly
Not willing myself to look up into your eyes
I hope you take good care of it
Remember not to let it break or anything

And then with one last look at you
I turn and walk away rubbing the thick bandages
Criss crossing my chest under my shirt
I stopped just a few feet away

I forgot to tell you
I yell to you and watch as you turn
Shock still evident in your eyes
I love you


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Wed Apr 22, 2009 9:59 pm
Samsal says...



this was nice. touching. yeah i wasnt sure if there was a rhyming scheme at first either but it was very sweet.=)




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Wed Apr 22, 2009 8:38 pm
poketheprincess says...



At first i was confused to whether or not there was a rhyming scheme (until i read a little further). It's very good, though.





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