Published September 30, 2010
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Thanks so much, Nike! I feel so honored, as this is my first story (and first comment) on YWS! I've split it up into three parts now, so thanks for the advice!
Wow. This is crazy long. You've got to put it into chapters or at least parts! No one will bother reading everything all at once.
What I thought of it? Perfect. Written to perfection. At first I thought the main character was a girl until a little later when I found out his name was Peter. That's my own fault.
I loved it. This was perfectly written, no edits. Except for length!
Keep Writing!
Nike