Hello, hello! I'm here to review!
First and second stanza - loving them. The smilies, the imagery, ALL of it! Just... wonderful. It can see the lady's feet, the description is just immaculate. The rest of the poem is like this, and I love it so much. It's so so so nice to read. For the first two stanzas, one could guess its about some womanly figure, be it grandmother, mother or significant other, that this person is taking care of, the massage them, make sure they don't get sore for whatever the reason may be. The person they are helping seems frail, maybe.
The next two! It's gets a bit... dark? I guess. I dunno how to describe it. You can seem the resentment the person may hold towards them, this character or person knowing this lady won't be what she was in her prime but she still thinks she can be like that, that she still is, perhaps? They know shes weak, needing to taken care of.
And the last two. They both know that some issues can't be fixed, no matter how badly they want them to be. Her bones ache, her muscles and tendons and maybe even her heart for something she can no longer have. So you/the character are there to comfort her, make her believe she is still what she was or to help her relive those days in some way, shape or form.
Otherwise, that's about all from me! I really liked it. It read well and I LOVED the description.
- Cow
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