Dementia Love

These lines are so realistic! Impossible not to believe in the deepness and sincerity of them!
You've created amazing masterpiece and this part sounds especially beautifully to me:
"If only for an eternity,
I'd hold your hand for the journey,
To that place in the sky"
Very strong and produce powerful effect!
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with admiration

Wow, this is really lovely.

I feel that the tone is accepting which makes the poem very moving. This person accepts that their love has this horrible illness but just wishes that things were different. The tone isn't angry and bitter, it's light and it works well.

It reminds me a lot of The Notebook.

Anyway, I'm not great at poetry so I can't really give very good critical feedback.

I enjoyed this piece, it's short and simple but the message is very thought-provoking.

Well done

Hi! Writervid here for a review!

Wow. This poem, as short as it is, hit me hard. You nailed mood and tone, and I honestly loved that. I also really love the fact that you just said what it is like to live someone with dementia simplistically, without using metaphors or analogies or making it too complicated. One of the reasons that this poem really made me FEEL is because it didn't beat around the bush or use a lot of literary devices or anything; it just went and said it. That was so, so effective here. Fantastic job.

However, there were a couple of lines/words that either a) weren't impactful and therefore make me think they should be cut, or b) I would like to look at the meaning behind.

The first line to look at is in this section:

I'd tell you a funny joke,

Just to see you laugh,

Just to see your smile.

Now, the part I have a problem with isn't with the laugh or the smile. That made me go "awwwww". It's the "funny joke" part that bothers me. When you say the word joke, the fact that it is funny is implied;what's the point of telling a joke if you don't think it's funny? So the funny part of that line really isn't necessary, which is why I think it should be cut out.

The second section that I'd like to look at is this one:

If only for a fleeting moment,
Just so our eyes could meet,
Without the vacancy,
The hesitance.

The way the first part of this is phrased is very confusing to me, and doesn't work to form this section into its own independent thought. If you look at it on its own, away from the rest of the poem, it doesn't function. Which is why you should probably rephrase the first line of that stanza so that it can make sense on its own.

The last thing I'd like to look at, merely to look at it, is this:

So we're together when we die.

There are multiple ways this could be interpreted. First: the journey makes a relationship. Second: if you're together with a person through it all, part of you dies with them. Third: the speaker never wants to be without their beloved and would like to be with them even in death.

Idk, I just thought that was interesting and a really clever way to end it. Leaves it up to interpretation, which is nice when dealing with heavy topics. Beautifully done.

Overall, a just fantastic poem. Great job.