Published February 23, 2012
Death's serenade
it's the dark and the rain
it's the sky and the fallen sun.
It's the splash of a tear
past the heart and the fear
that dwells in the sight of a gun.
He beacons and calls
so bright past the fall
of your own state of mind.
And he sings a great tune
from dusk until noon
removing the painful bind.
And oh how he sings!
And how his lyrics ring.
The world he sings so bright and new
so sprinkled with morning dew.
And he smiles, smiles to you
and tells you to take the gun.
Down a shadowed path of fear
lies the light that's drawing near
as he sings the joy of the moon.
Feel it in your empty heart
what you lost, had torn apart
and what he'll bring when he comes so soon.
Death's serenade
it's the dark and the rain
it's the sky and the fallen sun.
It's the splash of a tear
past the heart and the fear
that dwells in the sight of a gun.
The taunting and jeering
and torture of life
shall be gone without a fight.
Oh what suffer you've endured
And how the others never heard
while you screamed in agony
while you gasped and tried to breath
while no break would let you leave
the painful pit of life.
But he has mercy
He has love
come to him, oh tortured one.
Come to him and never run
from the thing you yearn.
Feel the pain melt away
and yes, dear child, you may stay
but first, oh daughter,
first, oh son,
first you must
take the gun.
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
This is really lovely, I like it I could really feel the dramatic parts and happiness ones in this poem. I also like how you used personification in this also by comparing death too a person, I like the metaphors to where you compare to unalike things together in this. Keep up the good work. This is such a lovely poem
Thank you! I really appreciate it.