Like a wrinkle in time, the past broke through,
Unfolding memories that still haunt me.
My mind, tight once light, still holds what I've seen,
A June that wouldn't end, a week I couldn't bend.
Just by remembering, by seeing, that was my agreeing.
And that panic is what Iâm still clearing.
Monday was an introduction to a bottomless nightmare,
Tuesday had diaries and more testing to endure,
With a ticking clock, an endless sheet,
And no space to breathe in between.Â
Then amid the chaos, the week blurred.
Like a rapid, spinning wheel,
Until the final bell began to chime,
Releasing me to rest â yet haunted by the hours I barely survived.
Then I blinked, pulling myself back from the abyss,
Stepping out of a memory that still leaves me frozen in panic.
I am back in the room, pinned to the present,
Leaving behind a ride that took forever.
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The poem has some really strong imagery, especially in the parts with the ticking clock, the endless sheet, and the final bell. Those details make the memory feel much more real because they give the reader something specific to picture instead of only describing the panic. That fits well with Ezra Poundâs idea that poetry should be direct and precise.
I do think some of the broader phrases, like âbottomless nightmareâ and âfrozen in panic,â could be made more specific. Pound focused a lot on cutting unnecessary language and letting the image carry the emotion, so the poem might be stronger if it trusted those details more. The rhythm also feels a little forced in places, especially with lines like âagreeingâ and âclearing,â so letting the wording flow more naturally could help the poem feel smoother.
I really liked how this poem takes us through the week almost like we are experiencing it alongside you. The days being mentioned one by one made the memories feel more real, and I especially liked the feeling of being trapped between the past and the present. The ending was also really effective because it showed that even after the week was over, the memory was still affecting you. A very emotional and relatable piece.