Young Writers Society

"Those who fear the ocean are wise to do so,

For it is a vast and unforgiving entity.

Those who sail the seas know to respect it,

As they realize the immense power it holds.

." I love how you make it sound like a living being. I mean it is but you illustrated it perfectly here

"It is an enormous mass that throws itself onto the shores,

Eternally eating away at the place we call home.

Those on the coasts are always and forever at its mercy,

As just one strike could destroy an entire civilization.

." I love the way you described its power. It literally can crash cities, and eat away at stone. Eating away i thought of eroding stone or concrete.

"We know next to nothing about the ocean,

With its unexplored regions that hold treacherous secrets.

Its deepest inhabitants are completely foreign to us,

Armed with jaws that rip and tentacles that tear.

."
This is amazing because fear of the unknown is what makes the ocean so creepy. The fact that there's no way to actually explore all the ocean means there are some "monsters" that we could not even know exist.

"Countless ships have been lost to the ocean,

Dragged to impossible depths and swallowed whole.

Was it the raging brewery of storms and waves,

Or unfathomable horrors that crave flesh and bone?" I love the way you described the ship sinking by the ocean swallowing it whole. I saw that happening in my head

Hello, my favorite Pokemon

I really enjoyed reading this poem.
First of all, I think it's really interesting that you really took a deep dive into the treacherous parts of the Ocean. When I think of Ocean, I usually think of peaceful water with colorful fishes swimming around. Yet, as you mentioned in the poem, 'We know next to nothing about the Ocean, with its unexplored regions that hold treacherous secrets'. As human beings fear the unknown, I see how dangerous and intimidating the concept of 'ocean' could be.
I think the true fun behind reading poetry is being able to feel it with heart, not understanding with the mind. Your poem really made me feel the fear and uncertainty that comes up from the deep seawater.
One last thing,

"The ocean is a merciless and vengeful beast,

For it does not care how hard you fight.

It will fill your lungs and pull you to the abyss,

Where no one can hear you scream."

The line 'for it does not care how hard you fight' represents the helplessness of a drowning man in the ocean so well. The natural truly doesn't care how hard you fight because it will take your life in a single blow.
anyways, great job!

Hi there

I really liked how your poem doesn't seem to be about an abstract topic, yet you still managed to make it extremely engaging and found ways to help your readers immerse themselves using interesting descriptions!

It is an enormous mass that throws itself onto the shores

Armed with jaws that rip and tentacles that tear

It is quite eerie how we know more about Space than the ocean. The ocean is here, on Earth. Space is far away and yet…

I think that the midnight deep is the most unexplored. It’s the deepest part of the ocean, where I believe the angler fish resides. Maybe one day we’ll understand. But not for a very long time and maybe not even in our lifetime.

I wish you a lovely day and night.

Hi! This is a random weirdo here to review.

Okay, you just made me shiver. That last line... that last line...

The ocean is a merciless and vengeful beast,

For it does not care how hard you fight.

It will fill your lungs and pull you to the abyss,

Where no one can hear you scream.

Was it the raging brewery of storms and waves,

Or unfathomable horrors that crave flesh and bone?

We know next to nothing about the ocean,

With its unexplored regions that hold treacherous secrets.

Its deepest inhabitants are completely foreign to us,

Armed with jaws that rip and tentacles that tear.

Good day! This is Ina aka loveissourgrapes and I am here to send a review/comment. It's funny how there are a lot of people in here that view the ocean and water differently. Some think it's scary, some think it's beautiful and some think it's both. For me, I think the water is both beautiful and calming but the more you think about it is actually scary. I don't know why it reminds me of the five men who went foolishly searching for the titanic boat deep down the ocean. It is now also one of my favorite poems of yours. This is like if under the sea from The Little Mermaid was realistic and way more creepy.

GengarIsBestBoy wrote:Those who fear the ocean are wise to do so,

For it is a vast and unforgiving entity.

Those who sail the seas know to respect it,

As they realize the immense power it holds."

GengarIsBestBoy wrote:It is an enormous mass that throws itself onto the shores,

Eternally eating away at the place we call home.

Those on the coasts are always and forever at its mercy,

As just one strike could destroy an entire civilization.

GengarIsBestBoy wrote:We know next to nothing about the ocean,

With its unexplored regions that hold treacherous secrets.

Its deepest inhabitants are completely foreign to us,

Armed with jaws that rip and tentacles that tear.

GengarIsBestBoy wrote:Countless ships have been lost to the ocean,

Dragged to impossible depths and swallowed whole.

Was it the raging brewery of storms and waves,

Or unfathomable horrors that crave flesh and bone?

GengarIsBestBoy wrote:The ocean is a merciless and vengeful beast,

For it does not care how hard you fight.

It will fill your lungs and pull you to the abyss,

Where no one can hear you scream.