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To Be an Adventurer Prologue

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For some, a normal life consists of finding a well-paying job and working dozens of hours a week to afford food and housing for their children, but for others, the best path is the path of the unbound; to have nothing tying you down; to roam the world with your arms wide open, taking on all of the adventures that come to your path. These few wanderers call themselves adventurers.

The life of an adventurer is a nomadic one. To move across the world exploring new lands, finding new people, and learning all about the world that is yet to be known. That is what being an adventurer is about. Some adventurers come together and form powerful alliances called guilds. Within guilds, adventures are allowed to join up and take on the trials of the world together. Guilds are like a home for many adventurers(seeing as many don’t have one) they evoke a sense of comradery among adventurers. One guild stands far above the others as the biggest and most important in all of the land of Larré: The Crown of Purple Roses.

Despite the name seemingly pointing towards the members of it being of nobility, the members of the Purple Roses guild are mostly rough rascals with no manners at all. This leads to the bar within the guild hall always being the talk of the town among adventurers of even other guilds. The conversation usually centered around “Who fought who?” and “He said what to who?.” The roughians of the Purple Roses often got into fights with others from their own guild…and sometimes other guilds. The loud bellows of the Purple Roses during any form of disagreement was more than enough to guarantee that no one, who wasn't already a member, would want to be associated with them…everyone except for a young boy, Rota O’Jarion.

Rota from a young age was always fascinated with the concept of the Purple Roses guild. His father was even a member. Despite the fact that Rota's father, Motoka, was almost always out of town he always made it a priority when he had the time to show Rota around the Purple Roses guild hall. It was a large building easily 7 stories tall with each story being smaller than the one below it. Because of this the building was shaped like a pyramid. On the highest floor there was the guilds banner, and above it were the words, written in gold, “A Gift From The Gods”. The banner depicted a crown with thorns that had purple roses sprouting from it being set upon a figure's head.

The legend goes that the figure was the founder of the guild and that the people of the country saw him as a king and he was gifted many treasures. One of such treasures was a crown of thorns from a rival guild. This was made to mock the guildmaster by giving him a useless gift. The guildmaster then placed the crown upon his head. The crown then sprouted purple roses. The guildmaster stood upon the crowd of intrigued onlookers and said “I realize that this is a gift to mock me, but I pity the fool who thinks of it that way. To me this crown, now with purple roses, looks like a gift from the gods”

The guild was painted a nice rich purple, and on the accents and frame was an old washed out blue. The building was so large that it seemed as if it was a whole other world when compared to the small young Rota. The guild was lage and expansive, but like most members of the Purple Roses, Motoka loved the bar; he even took Rota with him on the days he was watching him. Some may say that Motoka was a bad father, but on the days that he had his son he wouldn't drink a drop. He would always stay right by Rota holding his hand, and despite the rough exterior of the Purple Roses they were for the most part very nice to Rota. The days that Rota got to spend with his father were the best that he had ever had. He loved the Purple Roses guild and would even like to join once he became of age, but one day something happened…something that would change his life forever.

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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the review?

Top Graham Cracker - Rota wishes to join his father’s guild of adventurers, The Crown of Purple Roses. He wishes to go out and discover, to make a name for himself.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - The part where the King talks about the crown turning into purple roses and it ends with the word “gods”, I think that the end could have a period, but that’s just what I think. You don’t have to listen to this.

Chocolate Bar - I like how this prologue was written. It goes from talking about how some people live the mundane, and how some reach for the stars. I like the Crown of Purple Roses, too. It sounded very elite, but the members of it were unexpected. I like that! :> I’m intrigued to see Rota’s journey.

Closing Graham Cracker - An adventure that is waiting to happen, a dream that Rota waits to achieve. There is more out there in the world for him, but he will have to wait and see, as will I for the next chapter. I have enjoyed reading this. ^v^

I wish you a day/night of adventuring!

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PKMichelle
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Hello friend!
I saw your work in the Green Room and figured I’d check it out.


Per my interpretation, this was a fantastic start to a novel! It had a lot of unique information and was a lot of fun to read!

This chapter is a very simple introduction to the Purple Roses Guild. It goes into detail about the troubles within the guild and how it came to be in the first place. This chapter also introduces a character, Rota, and shows his relationship with his dad, providing some great background information on who I imagine will be a very important main character.

This was a great starting chapter!


If I could offer any sort of advice, I wouldn't! I didn't notice any grammatical errors or anything wrong plotwise. This was a phenomenal chapter, with so many great things happening!

However, I do wish it was a little longer, just a paragraph or so, so that I could keep reading this masterpiece.

You did great things here!


If I had to pick my favorite part, it would have to be the ending! I absolutely loved the last sentence and the way it was worded, saying,

He loved the Purple Roses guild and would even like to join once he became of age, but one day something happened... something that would change his life forever.


This is incredible foreshadowing that introduces a central conflict without actually introducing what the conflict is, which is really cool if I do say so myself! It sets up the next chapter in a wonderful way and genuinely makes the reader want to come back for more, so kudos to you for that!


Overall, this was a great intro for a novel! It had lots of awesome things and some stellar detail! I can't wait for the next chapter, so I hope you post it soon!

Thank you for taking the time to write and post this, and I hope this review is of some use to you!


Goodbye for now! I hope you have a magnificent day (or night) wherever you are!

Thank you very much for taking the time out of your day to read my story. I can assure you that the following chapter will be longer. I appreciate your feedback and look forward to releasing more chapters.



Every first draft is perfect, because all a first draft has to do is exist.
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