For those of you who don't know, slam poetry is poetry that is memerized and then performed before a panel of fellow poet-judges. Its really fun, and full of anger. This is my out pouring of anger long held back. I'm reading it friday night.
you
you are a liar
you are a cheat
you are imperfect to the nth degree
you are the biggest jerk ever to crawl the face of the earth
you are the eternal shithouse of male morality
you are the most selfish human being on the face of the planet
you are the reason I hated myself for three very long years
you are the worst thing to happen to me, ever
you are the biggest puppet I have ever had the displeasure to know
you must be the stupidest, most tactless man I have ever met
you are the ultimate source of all my anger
you are my arch rival
you are souless
you are the high prince of demons
you mother fucker
you idiot
you asshole
you whore
you fucking jerk
you liar
you judas
you liar
liar
liar
liar
liar
liar
I hate
hate you
you are nothing
you are worthless
you are less than worthless
you do not exist
fuck you
fuck you
fuck you
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I really liked this. A lot.
As for the feminism women praising.... Come on now, girls and guys and men and women are all the same.
Rather, we ought to say,
How embaressing to be Human.
Then we can and will strive to be demigods, et cetera, et cetera...
WOW. I see what you mean.
Read Valerie Solanas' SCUM Manifesto. It's...special. But along those same lines.
That is terrible... Ugh!!!
(China is cool lol)
If you want to quickly add omehting to the poem (13 year old suggestion)
You can say something like why are men so idiots and then question God. But... Currently, that's a bit... em... rough.
It does make me think. If God is Man, and he created Man, why did he make woMan ... em... sensitive, caring, loving, adorable, loveable... etc
Half the 'good' of any slam piece is the reading. Lots of shouting and anger and passion. I needed to get this on paper and out of my mouth, even if the person its directed at is not present.
I wish he was, he deserves this.
Long story short: Boyfriend for nearly 3 years, I go to China for a month. While I'm gone, he subsiquently dates and then fucks my (then) best friend. Picks me up from the airport, takes me home, breaks ups with me on the door step, telling me what a horrible person I am and how abusive I was and how it was all he could do to finally stand up to me. 12 days before we leave for the same college.
OH! It makes me so mad. Why are some men such IDIOTS?!
I can easily memorize this.
Tsk tsk tsk though, seriously-was all of that ranting anger nessisary?
It pretty much was entiirely repitant or whatever you spell it... (however).
You should have mentioned how you wanted to kill the person XD, erm, in what stormy, bloody manner anyway.
That's originality for yas.'
It was really good, I can relate exactly to this.
"you are the reason I hated myself for three very long years
you are the worst thing to happen to me, ever
you are the biggest puppet I have ever had the displeasure to know "
I can reaaaaally relate to that when me and a friend get into a fight.
I really liked this piece... and it just makes me want to ask...
Was this written about somebody real? (DUH LIZ) Who is it?
(Oh and good luck on Friday. I wouldn't dare do anything like that.)